Young lovers, vow eternal devotion
Yet your vital emotion is thwarted
By sensible forward-looking parents,
In love with successful financial worth.
Off with you dear Juliette – away!
Your Romeo will stay behind they say
Time erodes your fond memories and then,
Into your life soon came, new faces, others.
Through the passing years you change direction,
Your memory has faded and too Romeo …
You wed another … forget your young love,
The passion that was yours is forgotten .
Your choice for the secure and safe bores you…
Life so mundane, you don’t really exist …
Until you walked into that park and saw
Your Romeo of so many years hence.
You are now on your own, no husband,
To walk here by your side…the marriage failed,
He too walks freely, he’s got no attachments
The magic of your youth becomes a flame.
Passion flares though your youth has long since gone
Romeo and Juliette find your love
No knife or poison will destroy your lives
No parents wisdom separate your hearts.
The rightness eclipsed every mistake made along the way.
Bastet and Sekhmet's Library 
Yay! A happy ending for Romeo and Juliette! I love this.
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Thanks…it was fun to write it in pentameter though I think I got my iambics wrong now and again 🙂 Thanks for loving this!
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Your poem is beautifully written,I loved the story you told in verses.
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Thanks Ranu, I more or less put the two stories together…Romeo and Juliette with Love in the Time of Cholera – glad youliked it.
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Nice poem! I really like how the last stanza brings it all together. They sacrificed their youth for the freedom to love without interferences.
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Your ending line was great. But I was happy that though their youth may have been sacrificed their lives still went on to a happy ending.
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I love this line so much: “The magic of your youth becomes a flame.” Beautiful words, beautiful sentiment. 🙂
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Thanks Suzanne, I’m happy you liked the sentiment…and the line, thanks for your comment! 🙂
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I never liked Romeo and Juliette — never cared for a love that ended two young lives prematurely, so when I saw the title of your poem, I braced myself for a depressing revisitation to that tired old tale. However, what I got was fresh and new, and it left room for feelings of hope instead of despair. I much prefer your Romeo and Juliette to Shakspeare’s. Well done.
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Why thanks very much indeed, before I’d actually known what the story was about I liked the idea of two young people falling in love and going against convention…then I found out about what the story was really about and didn’t much care for it. The poetry is beautiful, the balcony scene, fantastic (in fact that was the only part I knew at the time of Shakspeare’s play) but all the rest…from what I could glean from the summary of Llosa’s – Love in the Time of Cholera (I haven’t read the book or seen the film) I thought I could do a revisit of Shakespeare’s story taking it where I’d like it to go ergo … no matter what, somehow they could get together … not so original I think Llosa maybe thought of it first but thanks so much!
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Thank you for a happy ending. Whether it’s original or not, it was so much better than the depression of Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliette!
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Amen! And your very welcome!
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Excellent. It’s Shakespeare’s 450th birthday. I think he would like this present.
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Now that’s something that slipped my mind…thanks for reminding me, and it would have been a boon if the bard could have read this little homage.
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I read one time that the only relationships that worked after a break-up was one broken up by outside forces. Good write.
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Uhm…could be true, and they could even be re-inforced perhaps. Thanks for reading!
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“The magic of your youth becomes a flame.”Ah,so true and that last para just said it all-love this different and more realistic take on modern R & J,Georgia 🙂
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Glad you enjoyed the poem and thanks so much for your feedback! 🙂
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I love your poetry-you have a knack for it 🙂
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Thanks, it’s “the magic of my youth which has become a flame” 🙂
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Loved this! I love Romeo and Juliet!
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Glad you did and thanks for reading…
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Ah now that is a more realistic twist and you know, it tells a bit the story of my son and his new (old teen) love. I must show this to him.
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That’s cool…sometimes a love story needs a breather…one never knows what could happen when two people meet up again after some years…the best of luck to the happy couple.
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Hehe, he started off as one, and now they are 4! She has 2 children. I think it’s great…I must write something about that and share it with him. I have such fond memories of my step-father (my mom’s 2nd husband)
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🙂 me too! I mean about my step-father who was such a wonderful man…gave me the love of Japanese art, among other things. Learned only a couple of years back that he was a closet buddhist! I now have one of his Golden Buddah which used to be in his ornamental fish pond. My step father had his two children and my mom us four.
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