Thursday Poetry Prompt #15: Invent a Form!
Well, I don’t know if this already exists or not, It’s 4 quatrains…with an added fifth Haiku type 5 syllable line at the end of each quatrain similar to the Haiku “cutting phrase”, and a fifth quatrain, at the end of the poem, in free verse.
The rhyming pattern is particular: aabbc aabbc aabbc aabbc abcd, but the first and third quatrains rhyme on the last word – the second and the fourth quatrain rhyme on the first word, “the cutting phrase and the last quatrain have no rhymes – the last quatrain is completely in free verse.
Unless someone can say differently, I’ll call this The Group Effect…in honor of the Group that’s been stimulating me so much.
Of Fig Leaves
We together one summer day,
Through the country we wound our way,
We laughed and shot some photographs,
Shooting fields and trees near the path,
And the day was young.
I stopped beside an old fig tree,
By the path it stood in bright green.
Taking quite a few close-up shots.
Making comments as I worked,
Thinking of a rhyme.
I talked to you about my blog
And how I like to clear the fog
Of illogical stories told,
Passed as history, but fool’s gold.
Philosophizing.
Asking why figs were interesting,
Masking my glee I just replied:
Biblical verse makes me ponder,
Quizzical questions I must pose
Your eyes opened wide.
You laughed at once remembering,
The burns you got from fig leaf sap
you too then speculated of the effects
of fig leaves on sensitive private parts!
it is hard when setting out to invent a form to be sure of originality… I am very unsure about my own attempts I am still unsure about the Timber but my current attempt the Monorhyme Sonnet I’m not so sure about…
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I’m not sure if a monorhyme sonnet exists either…my problem is not really knowing forms and never using them except in prompts I just ignore what exists or doesn’t exist…but, actually I think with all the bazillion things put together it doesn’ really matter. I just hope the poem is readable! 😉
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It’s quite readable! It could even stand on its own regardless of form 🙂
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Thanks for your comment and I’m glad you read and enjoyed it. 😀
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I created mine quite by accident lol!
And the name of it…. let’s see if you, dear cat, can pick up on the significance 😉
Love this one though…. so many interesting elements 😀
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Ah! I’ve gone to see your poem! Nice straight-forward form…really flows nicely dear dear…Lil as in Lilith…awar(ian) to be aware and a Detect – find …so to find awareness with Lilith? 😉
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actually, the sawa(rian) is Terasawa (my Beloved) and it’s actually Dectet – 11
but nice analogy tho 😉
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Ah…give a goddess a break…I tried to figure it out at 5:00am without coffee! 😉
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WITHOUT coffee?
FOR SHAME!! :p
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Ah…too true! (she hangs her head).
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Yep. This is immaculate. This is great! This is really, really great. And such a nicely thought out form, too. I might have to try this one.
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Wow…I’d been hoping you’d have a peak, if someone could tell me if it already existed that someone would be you! Would love to see what you do with it too!
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I’m pretty sure it doesn’t exist, and even the way you’ve gone about it with the switching rhymes from end to beginning… I haven’t seen anything like that before this. I’m sure there are similar forms (shorter forms), but that’s not really saying much. I think this is pretty unique as far as forms go.
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(Dancing and smiling)…yeah! I’m beginning to think I’ve the stuff of poets! 🙂
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Did you have a doubt? What? Noooo.
The poems you write? Of course you’ve the stuff of poets!
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There’s always a niggling doubt…thanks needed that!
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aabbc aabbc aabbc aabbc abcd… how do you keep it all straight??? Amazing. Great job with inventing a really interesting and unique (to me anyways) form!
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Thanks…beginning to think it is pretty unique at that…it seemed so to me and even Sahm King says it’s unique! 🙂 as for keeping it straight…secret…got distracted as happens living with other people and had to leave composition in the middle…when I came back, I’d forgotten I was doing a beginning line rhyme and got all upset because the last words didn’t rhyme…go figure!
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