Villanelle: Two Cats

This morning I saw two cats sitting on the ledge outside my house and wanted to write a poem about them, but a Haiku was too short and I didn’t want to write either a Choka or a Tanka.  I saw Shainbird’s lovely poem  trying to identify the form I came upon the Villanelle.  It’s a sticky form, but I thought I’d give it a try.

Villanelle

Two Cats

Two cats sat on a ledge at dawn,
Companionable as is rarely seen;
Lovely is friendship in the morn!

I stood there and our eyes were drawn
And I know how a cat’s sight is keen;
I thought, two cats to immortalize!

I rummaged in my purse with a yawn
Quickly, as to catch that special scene;
Lovely is friendship in the morn!

But the time it took, one was gone
I guess it should have been foreseen;
I thought, two cats to immortalize!

Alas, one had scampered like a faun:
“How could fate be so mean!”
Lovely is friendship in the morn.

I consoled myself as the Fox, woebegone:
“AH! The shot wouldn’t have been keen.”
Lovely is friendship in the morn!
I thought, two cats to immortalize!

2015 – Edited Version: 

Two cats sat in the yard at dawn,
Companionable as is rarely seen;
Lovely was their friendship to look upon …

I stood there and our eyes were drawn
And we know how a cat’s sight is keen;
Two cats sat in the yard at dawn…

I grabbed some paper and black crayon
Quickly, so to catch that special scene;
Lovely was their friendship to look upon 

I was too late the scene had been redrawn
I guess it should have been foreseen –
Two cats sat in the yard at dawn …

There was just one cat upon the lawn
Where two had so recently been
Lovely was their friendship to look upon  ….

A portrait of two cats could not be drawn
So a poem I wrote as you have seen …
Two cats sat in the yard at dawn
Lovely was their friendship to look upon .

© G.s.k. ‘15

13 thoughts on “Villanelle: Two Cats

  1. Pingback: This Little Moment | Shainbird

    • It is a tricky little thing, I’m not completely happy with this poem, I think I’ll try it again in the not distant future. I’ve not been doing much but clean up here, but at least I’m almost done! Have you done anything new with your Sonnet Workshop?

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  2. I have a little instructional on the Villanelle on my blog if it interests you
    http://tjtherien.wordpress.com/2013/07/22/a-foundation-for-form-how-i-break-down-a-villanelle-for-the-purpose-of-writing-one/

    I’m going to have to get cracking at the next installment for the Sonnet Workshop, I’ve been dithering a little there but I think I shall tackle the Spenserian Sonnet with my recent research on the Rhyme Royal still fresh in my mind

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  3. Pingback: Two Cats Revisited – Villanelle May 1, 2015 | Bastet and Sekhmet's Library

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