Ligo Haibun Challenge: October 25, 2013

A Haibun:  a Japanese form of prose, usually about a voyage, interior or through reality which culminates with a haiku.  The rules at Ligo Haibun requests that the Haiku does not follow the 5-7-5 syllable count.

This week’s prompts through Ese’s Voice are two quotes:

“And then there are the times when the wolves are silent and the moon is howling.” ― George Carlin

or

“Perfect order is the forerunner of perfect horror.” ― Carlos Fuentes

One can choose one or  both.

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“And then there are the times when the wolves are silent and the moon is howling.” ― George Carlin

autumn moonWalking under an autumn moon can be illuminating.  Really!  The other evening as I walked home from the concert, suddenly the moon came out from behind the clouds.  It seemed as though day had dawned.  The only other time I can remember such a glow, was walking under a winter moon.  The snow reflected the light creating a magic combination of reflections reverberating from the sky to the snow.

autumn night
moon howled its joyous cry
exciting memories

“Perfect order is the forerunner of perfect horror.” ― Carlos Fuentes

James was a perfectionist.  His sense of order went beyond just placing things in drawers and closets in a precise particular position.   Emily, his girlfriend, was not a messy person by nature, but she didn’t have that aesthetic’s sense of perfection that was so important to James.

She came to his apartment one day while he was away, and decided to do some dusting and general housecleaning.

Unfortunately, she didn’t remember the precise position of the objects she had moved as she dusted.  When James came home, he just looked around the room, pale, almost breathless.

“Hello dear James!  Surprise!  I’ve cleaned your flat for you!”

Many years later Emily told her story to her husband Bill, after reading a newspaper article about James, now a famous artist, and concluded:

“He raged and shouted then threw me out of the house!  I guess I was lucky, look what he did to his wife!”

flowers in fields
spontaneous perfection
nature’s harmonious order

14 thoughts on “Ligo Haibun Challenge: October 25, 2013

  1. Top marks for responding to both, and in such a different manner! The first one, where the moon howled in joy, made me smile in reminiscence, the second, for the fun of the story! If you know anyone in the public eye, then it is utterly intriguing to know the reality behind the media hype… Well done!

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  2. The haikus at the end are such a nice way to end things. I think I’ve said it before, but this form really combines your skills in narration, haiku, and photography in a wonderful package. 🙂

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  3. Duuude!
    That second one was all ‘sleeping with the enemy’. Scares the bajeesus out of me, that film. My only recommendation would be to try to create more of link between the prose and the haiku. It’s a difficult balancing act though; too close and the haiku has difficulty standing on it’s own, too distant and the haiku seems unnecessary.
    I’ve written some pointers on haiku writing on my about page if you fancy taking a look: http://flatfroghaiku.wordpress.com/about-2/.
    Take care bud!

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    • I never saw sleeping with the enemy…I see what you mean about linking the Haiku better…when I wrote it seemed an evident counterpoint…natural perfection to human perfection…rereading it now as an outsider I see that it’s not an easy lidea follow. Again, thanks.

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  4. That was very interesting – I enjoyed the introduction very much, with the haiku, and felt you could have expanded on that as it seemed very raw, enthusiastic and passionate, that walk under the Autumn moon. In saying that, I feel your 2nd haiku went very nicely with the prose and I saw what you were doing with it – worked very well and tied nature to the relationship. Very nice work.

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  5. You definitely made me smile . Because of the beautiful picture of nature about the winter almost magical moon. And definitely because of the Emily’s luck and Jame’s…pretty much surprise. Or should I say – shock. Really nice writing, Bastet.

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