Ghost Town

The October 27th prompt at the Community Storyboard this week is  ghosts!  I love ghosts…so here we go!


Courtesy of The Community Storyboard

James parked his car near the old hotel at the center of the ghost town.  The place felt the years of abandonment, the buildings were as grey as the day.

He’d heard about the town from an old friend, who knowing his passion for photographing old buildings, had given him a map so he could to find it.

“You won’t find this place on your navigator.  No one goes there anymore. It’s out in the middle of a wooded area, up the mountain road off from Gainesville.”

“And how did you come to know about it?” James asked.

“My great-grandparents used to live there back at the beginning of the last century.”

‘The place certainly looks spooky enough!’ James thought as he pulled out his camera and took his first shots.

He walked up the hotel’s steps, they creaked properly.  He tried the door and found that it was open so went in.  Cobwebs and dust were everywhere, but strangely enough, the place was still fully furnished and had a lived in air about it.   Funny it hadn’t occurred to him to ask his friend about a little history of the place. He made a mental note to do so once home.

The staircase seemed to rise up forever, but then he realized that at the top of the stairs, there was a full length mirror.  After taking more shots of the entrance way, then the dining-room and library, he decided to go up the stairs.  As he approached them, a girl came through the door.

“Oh hi!” he said surprised.

“Hi, when did you pull in?” she asked.

“Just a couple of hours ago.”

“And will you be staying long?”

“Uhm, I don’t think so, but who are you, they told me no one lives here.”

“Oh,  there are quite a few of us.” she’d answered without giving any information about herself he noticed.  “By the way, I wouldn’t go up those stairs if I were you.  Dangerous you know.  Anyway, I just saw your car and thought I’d see who you were.  I’ve got to go now though.”  Before he could say anything more, she walked out the door.

He pondered for a couple of minutes about the girl’s warning and then decided that, if he walked carefully he’d probably avoid any weak boards or falling planks; the stairs probably weren’t that dangerous.

He walked up the stairs backwards, wanting to get a few shots of the entrance way at different heights as he went up the stairs…and went up the stairs some more.

Suddenly, he realized that there were just too many stairs.  He’d been dstracted and had just kept climbing and climbing.  He turned around and saw that there were still more stairs.  Looking down he saw that they weren’t more than 20 or so steps.  He should have been on the landing and have come up against the mirror by now but there was still a whole flight of stairs to climb!

A chill ran down his spine.  He decided to retreat but found that he couldn’t, there was an invisible barrier that blocked him, he could only go up…so, he went up the stairs…

The girl sat on the porch steps, a young boy came up to her.

“Did you warn him?”

“Yep. But he went up the stairs anyway.”

They both shimmered as they became part of the air.

19 thoughts on “Ghost Town

    • Thanks Patty, I inspired myself from the photo that the Community Story Board put up…I was tempted to use my own, but this one was so cool i couldn’t resist. I’m happy you enjoyed the piece!


  1. This is wonderful Georgia – trapped on a never ending staircase. Now, that’s scary.

    I prefer such themes to the usual blood and gore stuff.

    You pulled this off so well, my dear.


    • Thanks Rob, I’m glad you liked the story, in reality, in my mind anyway, it wasn’t about the stairs, but the mirror. In the beginning I had entitled the story “The Mirror” but changed it so that I wouldn’t give away the ending. He’d walked up the stairs and got lost in the mirror. I find it interesting that no one grasped this! Yes, I gave poor James a warning through the visit of the ghost girl. Symbolic maybe of the warnings which life offers us against dangers which we can heed or not. We tend to look at what’s around us and make our decisions using our logic, which is faulty because we don’t have all the information we need to see beyond our little bit of reality. So if a stranger, and a young person at that tells us to avoid going up some stairs, well, we elaborate like James does, not realizing that there are dangers we’re not able to see. Thanks for commenting and giving me an opportunity to think my story out a little. I just write them, and then later, think about them ;-).


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