Friday Fictioneers: November 1, 2013 – Haibun: Koi

This is the photo prompt for Friday Fictioneers this week:




Kiko and James walked through the garden stopping by her koi pond.  The air was finally warming up as summer grew closer.

James was due to depart, his teaching experience in Japan ending.

“Have you enjoyed your stay?” she asked.

“Yes, it wasn’t what I expected at all. Come with me to the States tomorrow.” He said urgently.

“Ah, tomorrow is Kodomo no Hi. You will return courageously to your home and I will remain with my husband and children.  Who knows what the future will bring!”

 red carp flies
gentle rain falls on the pond
each drop a tear

Word count: 100

23 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: November 1, 2013 – Haibun: Koi

  1. Lovely, and yet … he’s invited a married woman to his home, and asked her to leave on a moment’s notice. Something dark, here. Dark and forbidden. Beautiful piece.


    • Yes, as sometimes are these clandestine affairs. I started out with a more classical love affair in mind, and then remembered the koi are associated with Children’s day (used to be Boy’s day) and the story changed course.


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