Līgo Haibun Challenge – Picture Prompt

Haibun

Blue Mountains

Dark winter.  Mountains often seem blue, how much more so when weighed down with melancholy.

The argument had started over a banality, as arguments often did.  The coffee pot left on over night, the toaster setting too high.  Nothing really important.  Under the banality though was angry loneliness; love replaced with resentment.  This trip had taken many years, but now the final destination was near.  Little arrows, for years, launched under the guise of loving suggestions.  Artfully done so that no objection could be made without her seeming unreasonable and unwilling to adjust to the “other”.  A slow colonization had taken place.  Once discovering the manipulation, inevitably rebellion grew.

She slammed the door as she went out, heading towards the mountain path not far from her home…the mist rose and she felt free as she breathed the cold air deeply in.  Then the tears came.

Once love brought her laughter, glad tears!
Anger now gifted her sad tears.

Conflict sown daily into your love
Will reap emptiness and slow sad tears

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Welcome to a new Līgo Haibun ChallengeLigo Haibun is experimenting with different forms of poetry as the haibun’s poetic ending.  But these are the instructions:

“This time we’d like the connection between the 2 lines of the ghazal couplet to be oblique and not direct, and to have the same number of syllables in each line. This is quite important. In a haibun with a minighazal as its verse component, 2 X 2 lines seems nice, with the last line rhyming with the first two as a refrain line. A longer set of verse may outweigh the prose. Ghazal are often about unrequitted love. This means that along with the prose please use haiku in any form and/or minighazal and pathya vat.”

16 thoughts on “Līgo Haibun Challenge – Picture Prompt

  1. Deeply moving piece of writing. I sense the slow and painful demise pictured here and I love the use of the phrase ‘little arrows for years’ Really wonderful portrayal of two lives moving slowly and inexorably away from one another.

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  2. Beautiful. The way you heightened the tension referring to objects like the toaster was really very nicely done, very clever, and of course the ‘mini’ ghazal fit beautifully. Very nicely done.

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  4. i like how you interpreted the painting – the sadness that comes out from the painting also flows in your haibun. you minighazal wraps it up nicely.

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