Carpe Diem’s Revise that Haiku #3, Buson’s “a hand-ball”

a hand-ball,
wet with the spring rain falling
on the roof

(c) Buson

This is the poem to revise by the great Master Poet, Yosa Buson (1716-1783).  This the story behind the Haiku:

[…] All day the rain has continued. It seems that it has never begun and will never stop. The poet goes to the verandah and stands looking out at the melancholy scene. Caught in the gutter of the roof opposite is a ball made of cloth that children were playing with and that lodged there by accident. The rain pours down relentlessly upon it as upon everything else, soaking its pretty design and colours. The rain continues meaninglessly, uselessly to beat down on the ball. The ball continues meaninglessly, uselessly to be beaten on by the rain. The poet suddenly sees, almost without knowing it, a ‘meaningless’ meaning in this ball, in this rain, in all things. The ball grows sodden, and still the rain falls upon it, as though it were a thing that the rain could make blossom.[…]

rain stormThis spring, it seemed to rain constantly, I stood in my loggia and took photographs for a prompt to pass the time (this is one of them) andthe rain poured.  Everything seemed so melancholy and sensless…yet with the senseless rain, summer blooms weren’t far behind…here are my attempts to “revise” Buson:

endless falling rain
the ball sits in the gutter
bright dandelion


gutters overflow
cloth ball swollen with spring rain
grape vines bloom early


the ball senselessly
yields to rain shower’s beating
mimosa flowers


stand in the loggia
spring rains continue unabashed
summer flowers smile

This was an interesting and inspiring prompt found at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.

7 thoughts on “Carpe Diem’s Revise that Haiku #3, Buson’s “a hand-ball”

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in shadows light - walking under weeping pines - spring rain

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