behind me,
broken bits,
relics of my heart,
relics of a love
that should have been
that could have been …
but, the clouds shifted,
casting an ominous shadow,
on the ground …
the fire,
promise of life,
died before it began,
leaving me in emptiness …
you danced blightly,
towards another,
leaving only
broken bits
behind you …
Inspired by Speakeasy – May 11, 2014
How does Speakeasy work? Here are this week’s rules:
- Your post must be dated May 11, 2013, or later.
- Submissions must be 750 words or fewer.
- Submissions must be fiction or poetry.
- You must include the following sentence ANYWHERE in your submission: “The clouds shifted, casting an ominous shadow on the ground.”
- You must also include a reference to the media prompt.
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- And don’t forget to come back on Tuesday and add your link to the Inlinkz grid!
You weaved a very relatable and sorrowful tale
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Thaks Oloriel…found the video inspiring.
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I love the symmetry of this poem, and cohesive structure that contains such moving words. Nicely done.
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Thanks Joanne. I thought it should have been longer, but in the end it seemed complete like this. Thanks for your feedback.
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Beautiful poem! I agree with Joanne – the structure and symmetry are fabulous and really add to the emotion in the words.
One little editor’s point – in the sentence prompt, it should be “on” instead of “upon” the ground.
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Thanks Suzanne, glad you enjoyed the poem and thanks for the feedback. Thanks also for the editor’s point..that up that slipped by has now flown away.
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Beautifully written.
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Thanks, glad you liked it!
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This was poignantly beautiful.
God bless you,
Cheryl
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Thanks Cheryl!
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This does have a nice flow to it. I think the length is good… sometimes the shorter pieces pack more a punch and this doesn’t need more words to dilute it 🙂
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I usually prefer haiku and tanka when doing my daily poetry…so when doing prompts I usually push for something longer…but this was born to be short. Thanks Janna for reading and commenting.
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Loved the flow. Very imaginative and well written! ♥
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Thanks Kathy.
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Beautiful. I love how you brought it back to the broken bits at the end. You worked both prompts in flawlessly.
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Thanks Leah, happy you liked the poem!
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Sometimes love is so heart -breakingly sad! The could and should have been-sigh!A beautifully written piece Georgia 🙂
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