Spring Morning – Friday Fictioneers – May 23, 2014

Copyright – Erin Leary

Copyright – Erin Leary

As I walk down the lane
Each drop of rain glistens
And I listen to the silence
In the spring rain, wandering …

The covered sky enfolds the world,
In mysterious whirls of gloom
Still, I’ve no room for sadness
In the spring rain, wandering …

The road proceeds for miles and miles
And I walking, smile just meditating,
Calmly contemplating life around me
In the spring rain, wandering …

Mist perhaps more than rain
Like my pain which is now dulled,
Long ago lulled by clement time, softened
In the spring rain, wandering …

Wandering in the soft spring rain one morning.

99 words


Friday Fictioneers – May 23, 2014

This is a hibrid sonnet…which I just put together like this because I liked it.

26 thoughts on “Spring Morning – Friday Fictioneers – May 23, 2014

  1. I love the rhyming structure of this, with the rhyme to the first line appearing half way through the second one – is that a standard technique or something you made up? (I’m a poetry dunce!) – either way it makes for a lovely rhythm and something half way between rhyming poetry and non-rhyming. I’m impressed!

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    • That was something I tried this morning…I’m not actually sure if it’s ever been done before, but it probably has been at one time or another.
      This morning when I wrote the first two lines they came out with that rhyming pattern and I liked it so tried to keep doing it throughout the poem. It has a sonnet structure but isn’t any like sonnet I’ve ever seen. I’m glad you enjoyed it and your comment was stimulating! Thanks!

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  2. What a lovely poem, Georgia…it reads so light and soothing…love the repetition of that last line, gives it that peaceful mood and you said it ALL under 100 words!! Brava Bella!!

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