About haiku, Jack Kerouac wrote:
[…] “The “haiku” was invented and developed over hundreds of years in Japan to be a complete poem in seventeen syllables and to pack in a whole vision of life in three short lines. A “Western Haiku” need not concern itself with the seventeen syllables since Western languages cannot adapt themselves to the fluid syllabic Japanese. I propose that the “Western Haiku” simply say a lot in three short lines in any Western language. Above all, a Haiku must be very simple and free of all poetic trickery and make a little picture and yet be as airy and graceful as a Vivaldi Pastorella”. […]
Chèvrefeulle from Carpe Diem Haiku Kai closes the May special tribute to Jack Kerouac with his haiku, Butterfly Wings:
In the sun
the butterfly wings
Like a church window
© Jack Kerouac
Remembering that the haiku Special is to try to write in the same vein as the “master” we’re reading, here are my efforts:
Streams of light
flowing down the mountain
mystic waterfall
Dawn’s first light
birds warbling
a Vivaldi concert
On the river
gull’s lonely cry
sea-side memories
G.s.k.
Carpe Diem Special #94, Jack Kerouac’s 5th “the butterfly wings”
This is a very special post, which I enjoyed very much. Kristjaan (Chèvrefeulle) did a excellent job analyzing this haiku. It is very informative and a good, so I really think it worth your time to drop by using the link above.
Bastet and Sekhmet's Library 
I like both Kerouac’s poem and yours. That is an interesting quote about Haiku, although I don’t know that I agree with him.
LikeLike
The interesting thing about the specials is getting the different takes on the subject … the difference between a language that uses a fixed amount of letters recreating sounds and the onji which uses thousands of symbols is really great. The onji usually are just two syllable sounds and when you see a translated haiku from Japanese you may in fact read a haiku of around 7 or so words … it’s an interesting issue, that some people get pretty intense about. I’m glad you enjoyed the post and poems!
LikeLike
Pingback: Cryptoquote Spoiler – 06/03/14 | Unclerave's Wordy Weblog