Distill that Poem – Carpe Diem Haiku Kai – June 10, 2014

Do not go gentle into that good night (Villanelle)

Dylan Thomas, 1914 – 1953

Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Though wise men at their end know dark is right,
Because their words had forked no lightning they
Do not go gentle into that good night.

Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright
Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Wild men who caught and sang the sun in flight,
And learn, too late, they grieved it on its way,
Do not go gentle into that good night.

Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight
Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

And you, my father, there on the sad height,
Curse, bless, me now with your fierce tears, I pray.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.


This is a beautiful albeit bitter villanelle, Dylan Thomas here rebels against that time in life when men renounce their vitality and await inevitable death:

Do not go gentle into that good night (Senryu)

rebel this tired fate!
make your eyes ablaze with youth …
even though night falls.

aged wisdom yours,
bitter with expierience,
tired – you greet death.

sing once more then dance!
your life is not forfeit yet …
live until the last.

no, not docile father,
as a sheep goes to slaughter,
curse with fierce tears – night

(c) G.s.k.

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21 thoughts on “Distill that Poem – Carpe Diem Haiku Kai – June 10, 2014

    • Thanks Jules. It really is a sad sort of poem…and have known many who reach a certain age and just give up so Thomas’ poem is pretty significant for me.

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    • I commented on your lovely distillation, I’m never sure if you “Blogger” writers recieve my thoughts…they disappear and I’m left wondering…did my comment go anonymous? Anyway, your contribution was so very well written and so very sad too. You did a wonderfutl job and caught the spirit of the poem beautifully.

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      • I screen everything on “B” first so comments seem to disappear. But they don’t. They just have to wait until I approve them. Just last week I had two spams that were selling something with comments so unrelated that it would make your head spin.

        Your comment is up now. Thanks for your kind words. I do know some folks that have just wanted to give up. But then there are also the fighters…

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        • Ah, now I understand… here at wordpress the spam is usually weeded out (sometime honest comment are too – sigh). I’m never sure if my WP address works with Blogspot making come over anonymous. Understand your problem though.

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          • I have WP and “B’ accounts just because of the difficulty of cross comment issues. And while I sometimes think I know what I am doing…depending on what accounts are open and who I am visiting – I automatically am in either WP or ‘B’ when leaving a comment even if it is for the opposite ‘site’. So that’s why I have the same icon for both and try to remember to put my name in or explain where I am coming from. ‘B’ does filter some Spam but differently than WP. At WP once you ‘accept’ someone – it actually knows that it is OK to accept from them again – so you do have to be careful in that regard because it is difficult to ‘un-accept’ someone. There is so much to learn. And I have barely have a C- in copy and pasting 🙂

            While I used to double post long verse on my WP long verse place and my ‘B’ site. I now delicate my be site to CD haiku (and related) posts. I actually have 4 WP sites. EEK. But that’s how I can sort my stuff. short daily, long verse, and fiction…the other one is devoted to a particular continuing story that I am taking a break from.

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          • Actually, I have a blogspot account as well, but it’s been dorment and I haven’t used it forever. It was the first blog that I opened a few years back but Ionly began blogging regularly last year with WP. Now there I have two active blogs, one for photos and the other is the “Library” I also have a private blog. I write on another 4 blogs as well. So I understand the confusion you’re talking about!
            Thanks for the info! I understand now why you put the blogspot links up. Actually a good idea. I must consider using my blogspot account in the future.

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    • Lol…thanks kiddo! This isn’t a very romantic poem…really rather dark if you think about it. I’m glad you like how I distilled it though! Thanks lady!

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