Before the Battle Began (Shadorma and Acrostic)
good king stood
admiring his knights
tall and bright
in the night
before the battle began.
and he thought:
“I reign in God’s name
and these souls
these servants
are mine to use as I choose.”
before the battle began.
the crows flew
over the battle field
awaiting
the ending
of man’s folly to conclude
without platitudes.
Brave were the knights
Ere the battle began
Forthright and true
On their horses so smart
Ready for combat
Eager to fight
The king
Honored and
Elegant
Bowed to his men
And hailed
Them smiling
Thinking of victory
Loving his power
Ere the battle began
But the corpses soon lay
Evilly deformed
Gone was the joy
And
Nothing was gained.
No, the crows don’t give a single croak about the platitudes or which side God is on – or not on –
Great write Georgia —
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Thanks … shoot I’m late for my own prompts now 😉
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Oh dear!
I’m stressing about prompts today…. having a hard time with the shadorma, and have NO IDEA what to do with the photo for Friday Fictioneers — have NO IDEA how to incorporate THAT into closing Abbie and Owen.
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Haven’t looked at it yet … Just went to have a peek … oh my, what is that thing? I haven’t done the last two FF … just keep getting bogged down. I’ve haiku heights and heeding HA to do and I won’t even go into the rest that’s getting left behind … sigh. Today (this evening) I start my 2014-2015 conversation course again and have been working on the lessons and contacting students ect.
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Cool! I am so envious that you are able to teach 🙂
If even Rochelle doesn’t know what’s in the picture … welll … on the bright side … we can’t be wrong, can we, no matter what we guess? 😉
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I finally got it written … but that was not an inviting photo as Rochelle even admitted … but it was cool how she explained what finally inspired her post.
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Very true.
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Wow, you can really tell a story. So well done… thanks!
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Quite a compliment … Thanks Zoebyrd for reading!
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Ouch, that last line. Well done!
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Thanks … glad you enjoyed it.
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Multiple formats in an awesome story. This was such a treat to read!
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Thanks Lance … I like mixing forms just as I like to mix medium when I paint. One of my favorite forms is the haibun – prose and haiku, have you tried it?
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Brilliant, absolutely brilliant. The twin styles are really amazing 🙂
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Thanks Sunita! I’m happy you enjoyed it! I personally love to mix forms.
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Great story telling and a reflection on the ultimate folly of war
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Thanks Maria … that’s where I was trying to get.
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This was really powerful. Well done!
God bless you,
Cheryl
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Thanks Cheryl .. war is so much of a part of us – but the end is all the same.
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Epic
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Thanks!
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