no place to go to
aimless I walk down the path
lost inside my wayward thoughts
where did our love go
when it dried up like fall leaves –
first flakes of new-born snow fall
(c) G.s.k.
linked to Mindlovesmisery’s Menagerie – BJ’s Shadorma & Beyond . Sedoka
A sedoka is a poem created by writing two katauta or stanza of 5/7/7 syllables … each stanza is a stand alone poem, but they complete themselves being placed together.
This seems so sad yet beautiful made my heart pain a bit x
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Thanks … glad you felt the emotion in the sedoka .. we tend to think of Japanese poetry as clean aesthetics, somewhere in the stratosphere .. but the sedoka was made for love … and often the second stanza was the other lovers reply to the first stanza 😉
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wow thats quite a thought it being in the straosphere 🙂 x
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[sighing]
Beautifully done, Georgia — feeling this one.
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thanks .. been looking a little more into the sedoka … seems sometimes one lover would write the first katauta and then the second would complete the poem … very community oriented the Japanese.
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I remember reading that somewhere — kind of makes the “solo sedoka” even more sad —
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very true …
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Wistful and lovely.
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Thanks!
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Dried up love….ouch….I can feel the crunch in my heart. Effective imagery 🙂
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Thanks CC!
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Love can get wayward without explanation. One just got to accept the inevitable. But given enough doses of recovery it can react immediately with gusto! Sad but lovely write, Georgia!
Hank
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Thanks Hank … the romantic streak let loose with the permission that only a sedoka permits in Japanese poetry … thanks for your lovely comment! Georgia.
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How this is sad and heartfelt my dear. Beautifully penned, cara.
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Ah yes … moments of sadness …
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Though fall has taken their love, but soon spring shall return too. Touched my soul 🙂
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