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Sunday Whirl with Poetweet – March 1, 2015

Posted on March 1, 2015 by Georgia

Credits: Istituto Superiore Enrico Fermi (Fermitutti)

Through her granite veins
circles a ghost of fear
with empty names
it howls within her flesh
giving weight to her anorexia
and her table phobia.

Through, circle, veins, granite, fear, ghost, names, howl, empty, flesh, table, weight … these are the words for Brenda’s Sunday Whirl Wordle number 201!

Which I’ve put together in a Poetweet an interesting form of poetry introduced to our Jen (The J of BJ) by thotpurge for this week’s Mindlovemisery’s BJ and Shadorma and Beyond!

28 thoughts on “Sunday Whirl with Poetweet – March 1, 2015”

Jen on March 1, 2015 at 08:22 said:

Ouch. So much power — and in 140 chars too. The granite veins … Just. Wow.
Brava, Georgia.

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- Bastet on March 1, 2015 at 08:50 said:
  
  Thanks Jen .. this, to me, feels more like a poem than yesterday’s effort 🙂
  
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  - Jen on March 1, 2015 at 09:27 said:
    
    And that’s all that counts — that you’re finally satisfied! 😀
    
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Neeraj (NEKNEERAJ) on March 1, 2015 at 08:24 said:

That was chrisp. Awesome!

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- Bastet on March 1, 2015 at 08:51 said:
  
  Thanks Neeraj for such an awesome comment!
  
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  - Neeraj (NEKNEERAJ) on March 1, 2015 at 08:55 said:
    
    Oh I meant ‘Crisp’. Looking at the limitations this was really awesome as it’s filled with every ounce of possibility within 140 characters. =)
    
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    - Bastet on March 1, 2015 at 10:33 said:
      
      An interesting form … as a haiku writer fount that this was actually pretty “roomy”, but you can get more pathos maybe in this. Thanks for your comment.
      
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oldegg on March 1, 2015 at 09:04 said:

How sad this picture is. We can see she is beautiful but she sees herself with cruel eyes. What amazing use of all the prompt words.

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- Bastet on March 1, 2015 at 10:39 said:
  
  Thanks oldegg … the photo is from a school newspaper and couldn’t find the credits for the photographer … an awesome form to play with.
  
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C.C. on March 1, 2015 at 09:30 said:

Wow, this is so powerful, especially in combination with the photo. Plus, the brevity of the words highlights the impact of their punch and meaning. What a difficult challenge to merge the two prompts….but you nailed it!!

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Tracesofthesoul on March 1, 2015 at 10:01 said:

Breaks my heart to see this…and yet they call us so many times with their struggles with disordered eating…sometimes it is a lifetime struggle…you can live without smoking, live without doing drugs or drinking alcohol but you cannot live without eating…so sad.

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- Bastet on March 2, 2015 at 05:22 said:
  
  Eating disorders are really the bane of our western civilization ..
  
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  - Tracesofthesoul on March 2, 2015 at 09:29 said:
    
    You know , I was lucky not to have gotten caught up in this since my mom and sister has issues with disordered eating. I just love food too damn much!! 🙂
    
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    - Bastet on March 2, 2015 at 10:33 said:
      
      Thank heavens … my Mom has the same problem.
      
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Jae Rose on March 1, 2015 at 10:47 said:

There is a strength in her face despite her obvious ill health – the granite pull of addiction…powerful write..

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- Bastet on March 2, 2015 at 05:27 said:
  
  Thanks for reading and sympathetic comment.
  
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http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com on March 1, 2015 at 11:29 said:

This is a powerful poem on a traumatic theme.

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- Bastet on March 2, 2015 at 05:29 said:
  
  Thanks Vivi … very difficult subject to write about.
  
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magicalmysticalteacher on March 1, 2015 at 17:13 said:

“giving weight to her anorexia”

Powerful line!

Whirling for Good or Ill

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- Bastet on March 2, 2015 at 05:36 said:
  
  Thanks MMT …
  
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hitandrun1964 on March 1, 2015 at 18:37 said:

am I thin enough
thin enough for
your unrealistic demands
am I acceptable yet
can you look at me
and not call me fat
do I look like a little girl
am I everything you
ever dreamed of
I wear a -10
does that make you happy
I’m trying to
give you what you want
what society demands
I’m dying a little
every day

am I pretty enough for you now

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- Bastet on March 2, 2015 at 05:42 said:
  
  Powerful Gigi … I was born in 1952 and entered my teens when Twiggy was all the rage and changed how girls were supposed to look … Though I’ve never suffered from anorexia I’ve always felt fat …how well your poem suits this age.
  
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The Writer's Village on March 1, 2015 at 19:06 said:

I would have pressed like if the piece was likeable.
it was upsetting, powerful, moving, emotive.
Nice work. Randy

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- Bastet on March 2, 2015 at 05:43 said:
  
  Know what you mean … there’s nothing to “like” about this poem, thanks for commenting Randy.
  
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Leigh W. Smith on March 1, 2015 at 21:27 said:

What Randy of The Writer’s Village said is true; it was hard to “like” this piece. Yet, it is a masterful use of the words in the prompt. Granite veins and the giving of weight to the anorexia are beautiful, despite the really hard-to-look at photo and disconcerting content. I’ll have to check out this “poetweet” concept; don’t think I know of that one.

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- Bastet on March 2, 2015 at 05:47 said:
  
  The poetweet was new to me as well, as I don’t “tweet” … and I do understand about not wanting to “like” this poem … not all we write is something we “like” to read. Thanks fro dropping by Leigh and leaving this comment!
  
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purplepeninportland on March 8, 2015 at 01:30 said:

Powerful words to match a sadly powerful picture.

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- Bastet on March 8, 2015 at 07:55 said:
  
  Alas .. thank you for your comment.
  
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