REBLOG – No Street Lights (renga with Jen) – March 7, 2015

no street lights tanka

After composing this haiga in response to Carpe Diem Tanka Shrine“No Street Lights”, I had some reservations as to whether it worked as a tanka.  After talking with Georgia (Bastet) we agreed that this may – perhaps – be effective *either* as a haiku *or* as the hokku / first response in renga.   Then we created a renga based on this feeling!

Here is that renga.  Because WeirdPress does strange things with formatting on occasion, Georgia’s portions will be in blue and my portions will be in green.

no street lights
along this crumbling sidewalk –
just my jagged breaths
*
the ghosts of autumn
gossip in the night

the screechy owl’s song
blends with the cricket concert
at midnight

a growing dampness
blankets these black hours

– Morpheus’ smile
shades vineyards and corn fields
dew drops on lilies

wet grass clings to my feet
as if memory

long long silences
between sleeping visions
of bright nebula

yellow stars on velvet –
a cat blinks in the hedges

alone in the yard
his sensations all aglow
her perfume whispers

a shower of rose petals
and the clink of wine glasses

loving embraces –
the ghosts of autumn
gossip in the night
*
along this crumbling sidewalk –
just our jagged breathing

Thanks Jen for doing this renga with me … a great experience! I’ve chosen this unorthodox method of reblogging because WeirdPress tends to put any images that may be up for a post into my media library .. so the choice is either to copy just what I want or get a bunch of extra stuff.  For Jen’s full post follow the link above … and visit her blog if you haven’t yet .. you’ll love the adventure!

 

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