Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge #94 – July 17, 2015

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after my walk:
a perfect spiderweb
stuck to my glasses

© Lee Gurga

unlike the lowly fly
I lived to tell the tale

intricate patterns
are pasted on my lenses
like shattered glass

© G.s.k. ‘15

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Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge #94 Lee Gurga’s “a perfect spider web”

26 thoughts on “Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge #94 – July 17, 2015”

        • No when you write it alone … it’s a chain haiku or a tanka …

          so, apart from the fact that you could go to carpe diem for a first haiku, I’d love to renga with you. What happens in a real renga is that one poet begins the collective poet with his/her haiku, the second poet completes the first one with two lines of around 7/7 syllables (I won’t go into modern haiku rules) and then puts up a continuation poem for the next poet to complete … the collective poem is finished when all agree to end it.

          So:

          summer dreams
          standing in the warm rain
          under the moon

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        • Very nice …

          now try this … I’ll write a haiku to follow up this ending and add another ending … then you write a haiku for my 7/7 ending ..

          pearl necklace
          held in her hands – shimmering
          broken dreams

          do tears mingle with rain drops
          not even the moon can tell …

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    • Thanks Hamish … I usually write a haiku after the renga response because that’s how the old renga worked. One completed the hokku and then presented a continuation for the next participant.

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