after my walk:
a perfect spiderweb
stuck to my glasses
© Lee Gurga
unlike the lowly fly
I lived to tell the tale
intricate patterns
are pasted on my lenses
like shattered glass
© G.s.k. ‘15
Written for:
Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge #94 Lee Gurga’s “a perfect spider web”
WOW! This was fascinating–the image and perspective, and language. Maybe I need to write a renga now…well, not this minute, but later now.
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Rengas can be fun … I enjoy doing them with haiku poets from time to time too.
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Would you be willing to assist me with the first one? As I understand, it takes 2 poets…and I don’t think split personalities count…
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No when you write it alone … it’s a chain haiku or a tanka …
so, apart from the fact that you could go to carpe diem for a first haiku, I’d love to renga with you. What happens in a real renga is that one poet begins the collective poet with his/her haiku, the second poet completes the first one with two lines of around 7/7 syllables (I won’t go into modern haiku rules) and then puts up a continuation poem for the next poet to complete … the collective poem is finished when all agree to end it.
So:
summer dreams
standing in the warm rain
under the moon
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Oh this is lovely! I just add my 2 lines of 7 syllables each? Great, I’ll come back later. (I don’t think I’m ready for carpe diem just yet–too much going on, and I don’t want to get discouraged right away.)
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No problem … my idea is to have fun …
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“Each drop sparkles, pearls falling
On cheeks, into open hands.”
How’s that??
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Very nice …
now try this … I’ll write a haiku to follow up this ending and add another ending … then you write a haiku for my 7/7 ending ..
pearl necklace
held in her hands – shimmering
broken dreams
do tears mingle with rain drops
not even the moon can tell …
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Releasing prayers for
Restoration—planting new
Hopes in richer soil
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blossoming flowers at dawn
inviting summer garden
butterfly kiss
the peony blushes pink
in the morning sun
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Great continuation – and the shattered glass is a wonderful image 🙂
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🙂 thanks – an interesting hokku!
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beautiful continuation, with the shattered glass 🙂
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🙂 thanks … I’m happy you enjoyed the renga!
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Oh, poor fly! :0)
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They usually meet a bad end with spider’s webs. …
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Enjoyed your musings – renga and haiku
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Thanks Hamish … I usually write a haiku after the renga response because that’s how the old renga worked. One completed the hokku and then presented a continuation for the next participant.
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I like the imagery here !
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It was fun to write … though I’m not fond of going afoul of spiderwebs when I go on walks …
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Hahahaha— it always bugs me too — it’s amazing how much they can spin in 24 hours… 😀
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You think! I’ve seen some bushes in the woods completely covered in the gunk!
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Yes– the path I take just about day seems to get more than it’s share — you’d think those damned spiders would learn not to build there. 😀
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Unless of course they’re trying to catch you … come into my parlour said the spider to the fly … 😉
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It’d have to be a pretty hungry spider….. and big, too. 😀
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Yep … guess you’re right about that!
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