What Have I Eaten? – Free Verse – August 24, 2015

Posted on August 24, 2015 by Georgia

Collage 4

what have I eaten – lies and smiles
chocolates from a poisoned box
raven now sing of all the times
you’ve led me down this well-trod path
frozen like a crystal is my heart
as the clock talks monotonously
ticktock – ticktock
the pendulum swings but time has stopped
as here I lie inside my tomb

what have I eaten – lies and smiles
what some people call love

Written for:

Writing Prompt #120 “Collage 4″

23 thoughts on “What Have I Eaten? – Free Verse – August 24, 2015”

mindlovemisery on August 24, 2015 at 09:51 said:

Fantastic Georgia I love how you used the quote as the first line of your poem and continued with it brilliantly. That last line is genius!

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- Bastet on August 25, 2015 at 07:10 said:
  
  Thanks .. a great collage … it really was inspiring – I happy you liked it!
  
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  - mindlovemisery on August 25, 2015 at 14:06 said:
    
    Loved it =)
    
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    - Bastet on August 26, 2015 at 08:00 said:
      
      Thanks Yves.
      
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doveinthedungeon on August 24, 2015 at 10:01 said:

Oof!!!!!! When poison passes for love we are in trouble indeed.

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- Bastet on August 25, 2015 at 07:11 said:
  
  Ah … all too true … too often poison is disguised as sweetness and light 😦
  
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  - doveinthedungeon on August 25, 2015 at 08:10 said:
    
    Or … irresistible. Nothing’s irresistible.
    
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Valida Faire on August 24, 2015 at 12:46 said:

Oh wowza–killer last lines!

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- Bastet on August 25, 2015 at 07:12 said:
  
  Thanks Valida! Glad you enjoyed the poem!
  
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  - Valida Faire on August 25, 2015 at 09:23 said:
    
    Definitely.
    
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Adriana Citlali Ramírez on August 24, 2015 at 13:46 said:

Oh! Sweet poison! The last two verses are really clever.

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- Bastet on August 25, 2015 at 07:12 said:
  
  Thanks … glad you enjoyed the write!
  
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summerstommy2 on August 24, 2015 at 21:08 said:

Such powerful thought provoking words Georgia. This is a very meaningful response and your last line resonates with me. Well done.

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mj6969 on August 25, 2015 at 01:42 said:

Beautifully expressed with intense emotion and feelings. Great job Georgia!

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The Muscleheaded Blog on August 25, 2015 at 10:34 said:

Strong and thought provoking write, G !

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- Bastet on August 26, 2015 at 07:59 said:
  
  Thanks Chris …
  
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Oliana on August 26, 2015 at 09:59 said:

Ouch!!! but well done, cara!!

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- Bastet on August 26, 2015 at 10:16 said:
  
  Thanks … I tried to write to the collage ..
  
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  - Oliana on August 26, 2015 at 10:45 said:
    
    you did this splendidly!
    
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    - Bastet on August 26, 2015 at 10:56 said:
      
      Thanks … 🙂
      
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      - Oliana on August 26, 2015 at 11:05 said:
        
        de rien
        
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Brenda Davis Harsham on August 28, 2015 at 13:42 said:

This one is like the darkest chocolate. Bitter with a biting aftertaste.

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- Bastet on August 30, 2015 at 05:48 said:
  
  Ah … I agree.
  
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