Tokubetsudesu – Troiku – September 23, 2015

first bridge

autumn reflections
as I cross the sun warmed bridge
geese fly south

© G.s.k. ‘15

autumn reflections
old man contemplates winter
under the hot sun

as I cross the sun warmed bridge
ducks laugh down stream
– diving for trout

geese fly south
the noisy swallows have gone
but the blackbird sings

© G.s.k. ‘15

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Carpe Diem Tokubetsudesu #62 Troiku – today’s feature is an invitation to write a whole new troiku … what is a troiku … it’s a chained haiku born from the lines of a Japanese haiku – like a Russian sled pulled by three horses!  This form was invented by the host of Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, Chèvrefeuille and here are a couple of examples:

as you can see this one was based on Basho’s “Old Pond”.

seeking knowledge
getting deeper insight
hermit’s choice

seeking knowledge
contemplating under the Bodhi Tree
like Buddha

getting deeper insight
while listening to the silence
the sound of rain

hermit’s choice
seeking refuge high up in the mountains
closer to the gods

© Chèvrefeuille

13 thoughts on “Tokubetsudesu – Troiku – September 23, 2015

  1. Triumphant success! You carried this off with flaire.
    I loved the contrast hot and cold, reality and thinking ahead, the goings on with noises and movement: all this in a tightly prescribed format.

    Like

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