but now the rains begin to fall
soulful – autumn winds howl
mourning the passing of another summer
he laments his passing youth
soulful – autumn winds howl
the trees shudder in their anger
and bend before their might
mourning the passing of another summer
he sits in a pathetic funk
apparently sedate – apparently sedate
he laments his passing youth
he’s taken by a righteous rage
but nothing changes – except the leaves
© G.s.k. ‘15
i just discovered this lovely form this morning (it’s called the Trimeric) on Two Paise Poetry … who learnt it from Darklight Harbor and wanted to try it out immediately. The Trimeric was created by Dr. Charles A. Stone and here’s how it works:
a four stanza poem in which the first stanza has four lines and the last three stanzas have three lines each, with the first line of each repeating the respective line of the first stanza. The sequence of lines, then, is abcd, b – -, c – -, d – -.
I also used the words from Three Word Wednesday – pathetic, sedate and righteous.
Hi Bastet, thank you for the mention! Really how some forms are passed on by “word of mouth” from one poet to another.
Just a small note.. my blog is two “paise” poems.. small mistake on your part there, nothing major 🙂 Thanks again!
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Ouch … I’ll fix that asap … and yes it’s cool how forms get passed on one to another isn’t it! And happy to have mentioned you …
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Also, love the way you have weaved this piece together.. good use of the words and liked the flow of the poem as well.
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Thanks so much … it was great discovering this little form .. I really enjoyed working with it and think I will try to do so more in the future … thanks for coming round … but above all thanks for sharing your poetry!
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You are very welcome!
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WOW, powerful-good poem.
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Thanks J.!
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Most welcome.
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Interesting new form, troiku-ish… will definitely try it sometime soon!
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I thought the same when I saw it and wanted to try it out immediately! If you do try it .. would you pls ping me?
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Will do!! Need some inspiration.. muse is comatose right now 🙂
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Ah .. it’s the autumn doldrums I’m sure! This is way cool: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YU3huGk21as
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Thank you..that was fun! Check out “Jal tarang” on youtube for an Indian water based musical instrument..you might enjoy it 🙂
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Will do and glad you had fun!
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What a lovely shot – so sweet.
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Thanks Ladyfi .. glad you liked that photo … came from my archives 🙂
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Old age like autumn can be a beautiful thing or a time of torment. A delightful poem and a lovely picture.
Rosey Pinkerton’s blog
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All a matter of perspective I suppose … glad you enjoyed the poem!
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The sepia photo somehow illustrates the subdued rage – times passes…and we smile…falsely perhaps…but what else realistically can we do? and on that cheery note – a mighty fine poem!
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Loved your thoughtful comment … indeed there isn’t much we can do about the passing of time, but it’s probably better to find a way to accept the facts as gracefully as possible … and n that cheery note ( 🙂 ) Thanks a lot for your thoughts!
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It is indeed a lovely form. And you did it great justice in your poem IMHO.
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Thanks a lot … a lovely compliment 🙂
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I really like this a lot Georgia. The form is very interesting, one which I have never tried.
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I was fascinated by it … a lot of fun to work with Dom … thanks for dropping by.
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Such a melancholic feel to your trimeric poem…love it. I also was tying this form before …lovely!
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Cool … it is an interesting form … rather haiku-ish don’t you think?
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lol…trying/tying works too….I just checked: it was troiku not trimeric. What the difference?
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The difference is that a troiku is based on a haiku … you take the haiku and for each line write a new haiku … with the trimeric you write a four line poem the you elaborate three stanzas from the second, third and fourth lines .. It works out that the first line becomes sort of the title of the poem I think.
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Silly man learn from the past but enjoy your present
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Very wise Sheilagh Lee and I agree with you!
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This form is similar to the cascade form which uses four lines instead of three. One must accept and find the best in things we cannot change like the aging process. Thought provoking poem. Enjoyed it.
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Thanks Cressida .. in effects this form is similar to quite a few other forms I’ve come across (and which other’s have brought to my attention) – still I liked writing it very much. Yes, wisdom is accepting what one cannot change … with grace. Glad you enjoyed it!
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