The Warrior
under the moon light
in the last days of autumn
the warrior stood tall –
loosing her bow her arrow
made a perfect arc
then returning unto earth
fell in an arbour
draped in red and orange leaves –
a lone raven crowed
and two grey wood doves bubbled
the cold wind whispered –
she sighed in her keen knowledge
that snow would soon fall
pulling her woollen cape close
she looked one last time
then turning she walked away
remembering him
only as a summer breeze
she – one with the night
continued to walk her path
there in the moon light
of the last days of autumn
the warrior once stood
her woollen mantle drawn close
as softly fell a snow flake
© G.s.k. ‘15
Originally, the choka or long poem was an epic poem relating deeds of honour, love and other stories. It was more often than not sung and many were passed down only orally in that form. It was a form borrowed from the Chinese (in Japanese waka) – as were many other things in those far off days, including writing and Buddhism.
The choka can be of almost any length, because its form depends on alternating phrases (or lines) containing five – seven sound (onji) units (which we’ll call syllables). The end of the poem ends using two lines of seven syllables. So the form is five/seven/five, five/seven, five/seven, …. , five/seven/five/seven/seven (which creates a tanka).
Brava cara, the Queen of Choka still using that 4-letter word (snow) but I`ll forgive you. I love this,it also goes well with the photo at OctPoWriMo too. I truly love the mix of B+W and colour in your photo!!
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Thanks … I love doing Choka as you know – and I wanted a “moonlit” vineyard photo so I edited it to give at least the impression of a moonlit night. Glad you enjoyed the post … despite the four letter word!
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It goes down to 5 or 6 C nights here but next week we are expecting 16C…and the ONLY sunny day inthe forecast in two weeks in Monday, Election day here in Canada.
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Interesting … the sun wants to encourage people to vote! 🙂
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WOW–Impressive!
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Thanks .. I just love Choka … a great story writing form!
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Loved it. Never heard about this form before. You are a true muse 🙂
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Wow … thanks Sunita … it’s fallen more or less into oblivion, though some modern poets (both English writers and Japanese) have been trying to revive it.
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Chokra is a lovely form, giving you the chance to write what you have to say and then stop (i quailed at the Paradelle of thoday’s prompt).
Your poem is gorgeous. Sorry to be picky, but in this line “then turning she walking away” , walking is probably a typo for walked???
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So right you are … I’d changed that lin it but seem to have left it hanging with an ing … thanks so much Vivi – you’re a real friend!
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A beautifully constructed tale! I don’t believe I’ve heard of “Choka” before.
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It’s been around forever … but has fallen into disuse, like so many other poetic forms – some English writers as well as a few modern Japanese poets have begun to experiment with it once again …
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This is truly an amazing platform and your posts are always a treat ! You are so creative and adventurous in your writing , its a real pleasure 🙂 Thanks for sharing this.
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And thank you Amrita for your great comment … it’s very encouraging to hear one’s work is appreciated! Thanks so very much.
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Never before I came across “Choka” but loved it instantly.
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Thanks Deepti .. you might like to write one day!
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Loved it totally! Beautifully penned. 🙂
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This form is new to me as well and I love it…your poem was like staring at a painting that unfolded before my eyes. beautiful. (we have the that four-letter word starting with ‘s’ in the forecast here this morning!)
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And we got some on the mountain behind my house … sigh. Glad you like to form and the write!
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Thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I shall return with a fresh cup of coffee, and enjoy it again!
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Way cool … Thanks Misky.
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I’ve never heard of choka! This is very good!
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Thanks … perhaps you’ll try it, I’d like to see what you do with the poet Tahireh’s story.
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You know Tahirih? I would love to do that!
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Yes, I learnt about Tahireh from some friends I knew in Africa and then came upon her story once again in Italy as well. What a tragically brave woman she was! Is the correct spelling of her name then Tahirih? I’d always seen it written with an e instead of an i … but that’s probably because it was written in Italian documents.
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It varies from writer to writer. I’ve just always know it that way! 🙂
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I think that’s probably a common problem transliterating Arabic (in this case Persian) symbols. Thanks for the info!
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what a beautiful story! bravo!
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Thanks Candy!
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This is gorgeous.
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Choka form is new to me, beautifully expressed. Vivid imagery!
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Nice to show you a form you didn’t know!
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Beautiful form and you’ve captured the essence here with sing-song ease. Lovely!
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Thanks Grace … I simply adore choka. When I started to specialize as a haiku writer, I discovered that sometimes I wanted to say more than can be said in a haiku (classical or free verse form) so I’ve been studying the older forms of kyoka, sedoka and choka … and of course chained haiku and troiku.
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