OctPoWriMo Day 23 (Regrets) – Echo Verse Poem – October 23, 2015

Posted on October 23, 2015 by Georgia

I follow endless streams across the sky
– I
Watch the contrails weaving between a tree
– Free
Coming – going they’re never still
– Will
Inner peace – help me remain …
– Restrain
This ancient wanderlust which fills my soul
– Control
Insistent visions of a new far off shore
– Ignore
The constant whispered insinuation that enthralls
– Calls
Echo – echoing across my mind
– Intertwined
With visions of migrant birds and jet planes
– Banes
Are the cursed contrails in the last light of red sunsets
– Regrets

Echo Verse: An Echo Verse is when the last word or syllable in a line is repeated or echoed underneath to form a rhyming line, normally the last echo line becomes the title to the poem.

OctPoWriMo Day 23

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Illsa Gorrey on October 23, 2015 at 07:53 said:

I sometimes look at airplanes and wonder where the passengers on them are going. I wonder why they’re going where they’re going, and I begin to make up stories.
I like the way each line flowed into the next with this poem. Nice!

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- Bastet on October 23, 2015 at 12:00 said:
  
  I love to do the same thing … and it’s just as interesting when one’s travelling on a train! This is an odd form and I enjoyed using it … I was also trying to see if it could be read as only “echos” and only sentences … such as:
  
  I
  free,
  will
  restrain
  control
  ignore
  calls –
  intertwined
  banes –
  regrets
  
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J Lapis on October 23, 2015 at 08:45 said:

Interesting form, I must say.

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- Bastet on October 23, 2015 at 12:03 said:
  
  Look at Illsa Gorrey’s comment and mine to hers to see a new game hidden withing 😉
  
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  - Bastet on October 23, 2015 at 12:32 said:
    
    Although it didn’t work out well.
    
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    - J Lapis on October 23, 2015 at 12:38 said:
      
      A new game hidden within…imagining people on planes and trains? Or the single line of echo words?? I’m running out of brain power tonight–spent a goodly while catching up…
      
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      - Bastet on October 23, 2015 at 12:51 said:
        
        Alas … i don’t think I will be able to catch up at all. Dear hubby once home reverted to his usual “me” mode …
        
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      - J Lapis on October 23, 2015 at 12:53 said:
        
        Well I haven’t posted much, but there may be one you’d like….
        
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      - Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:22 said:
        
        I’m way way behind reading … plus had connection problems, but your writes come to me on e-mail so hope to catch the latest … hugs.
        
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      - J Lapis on October 24, 2015 at 10:49 said:
        
        Thanks!
        
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Sunita Prasad on October 23, 2015 at 08:58 said:

Amazing style. I loved the interwoven words. 🙂

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- Bastet on October 23, 2015 at 12:36 said:
  
  Thanks …
  
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Deepti Agrawal on October 23, 2015 at 09:18 said:

mingled words.. flowed and melted into one another making it an interesting write.

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:45 said:
  
  Thanks so much Deepti for your beautiful comment that makes me smile!
  
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Paloma on October 23, 2015 at 12:00 said:

I too feel the wanderlust, the restlessness … and the past regrets….
Very interesting form too.

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:44 said:
  
  I agree about the form … autumn seems to bring on the wanderlust worse than ever!
  
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  - Paloma on October 24, 2015 at 10:48 said:
    
    …. yes it does … in a huge way!
    
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Vellur on October 23, 2015 at 12:01 said:

Beautiful flow of words and thoughts, great write.

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:43 said:
  
  What a lovely comment .. thanks so much!
  
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twopaisepoems on October 23, 2015 at 12:54 said:

Love this form.. the photo you have attached is similar to the one I have on my page 🙂
Great job as always!

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:43 said:
  
  Way cool … and thanks for commenting … hope you had a lovely birthday feast!
  
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Steph Beth Nickel's Blog on October 23, 2015 at 16:03 said:

What an effective poem! So full of meaning and emotion. When I was driving my daughter to work this morning, she actually pointed out a contrail that looked like a rocket had taken off.

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:42 said:
  
  Thanks Steph for commenting and sharing your experience with me. 🙂
  
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Misky on October 23, 2015 at 16:17 said:

Very effective.

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:29 said:
  
  Thanks Misky 🙂
  
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writersdream9 on October 23, 2015 at 17:03 said:

Pulled this difficult form off with great beauty!

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:28 said:
  
  Thanks Carol … happy you found it so!
  
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Lisa @ The Meaning of Me on October 23, 2015 at 18:00 said:

I haven’t tried this form yet, but I am going to. I love what you did here – well done and effective. I also found myself looking down the echo lines to see if they did anything cool by themselves. 😉

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:26 said:
  
  I sure was hoping they would … the single words worked out fairly well … but had difficulty with the phrases! Thanks for dropping in!
  
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Cheryl-Lynn on October 23, 2015 at 22:24 said:

Ouf! mon âme était là…dans les nuages, dans les nuances de petits refrains, de regrets et de nostalgie. That poem just transported me…how I can relate to that mood…and this form is very interesting…I may try this soon, very soon.

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:25 said:
  
  Thanks so much Cheryl-Lynn .. nostalgia seems to be the autumn emotion … hope you do try the form … it’s fun!
  
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  - Cheryl-Lynn on October 24, 2015 at 13:31 said:
    
    Well you did see it…:)
    
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    - Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 17:44 said:
      
      Yes I did … but AFTER I wrote my comment 😉
      
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Dawn D on October 23, 2015 at 23:25 said:

I really liked this form. Maybe I too wil try it one day 🙂
Thank you for sharing it today, broadening my horizons with such beautiful words…

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:24 said:
  
  I like it a lot too … hope you do try it out! 🙂
  
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  - Dawn D on October 24, 2015 at 12:35 said:
    
    I’ll let you know, if I do it within the coming week 🙂
    
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    - Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 12:41 said:
      
      Great!
      
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Candy on October 24, 2015 at 05:28 said:

oh, this is special! love the echo form too.

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- Bastet on October 24, 2015 at 10:24 said:
  
  Thanks Candy!
  
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