that snowy afternoon
whistling under the jujube tree
moving cautiously
following rhythms of an ancient lay
the blackbird pierced the fog
with its jolly song,
with a pantomime of indifference
there in the whirling snow storm …
elsewhere
barbaric drum beats echoed
inside a smoke-filled tavern
there bawds and bullies laughed and played
in a charade of carefree joy
in rhythmic discordance …
they never heard the blackbird’s song
under the jujube tree.
© G.s.k. ‘15
blackbird, afternoon, whistling, barbaric, pierced, pantomime, bawds. whirled, moving, tree, snowing, rhythms
Photo originally found at. Trees That Please Nursery
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Thanks …
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Most welcome!
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The noise of “civilization” can surely drown out the beautiful silence!
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Ah – that all too often it happens … so, we have to find our inner silence.
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Great contrast …! I do like what you’ve done here 🙂
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Thanks Paloma … I’m glad it came out so well .. I was really more or less fooling around … kind of stream of consciousness sort of thing … but it edited into a decent poem.
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You did wonderfully 🙂
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Thanks again!
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Outside or inside – i think outside and the singing bird and snow seems far cheerier…but how easy it is to drown our sorrows and create false pleasure in the tavern also love jujube tree…
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Yes, better outside with nature I think … the blackbirds here are famous for being winter birds … though they actually sing (the male does actually) more in the spring. Jujube trees are so delightful. Thanks for reading Jae Rose.
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Not sure if I would rather listen to the blackbird or join the jollity in the tavern! A delightful poem of two contrasting halves.
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Who knows … I think communing with nature is the better choice .. but then that’s just me … Thanks for reading Keith.
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Yes, too often life and everyday habits allow us to miss the good things,
Elizabeth
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That was the point … thanks so much Elizabeth for reading!
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The blackbird ‘s song is far more attractive than beer and bawdy women.
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Thanks my friend for visiting … I agree, there’s just something so much more satisfying being with nature ..
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