dawn breaks
shadowing willows and pines
in black and white
sun’s reflections
outlining autumn trees
at dawn
© G.s.k. ‘15
Carpe Diem Haiku Writing Techniques #21 The Technique of Mixing It Up: today’s technique helps us include the author creating a bit of ambiguity using the gerund in one’s haiku … who is doing the action, nature or the author? Here are two examples of how the technique works:
end of winter
covering the first row
of lettuce seeds
© Jane Reichhold
meigetsu ya ike o megurite yomosugara
full moon
walking around the pond
all night
© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)
Nicely painted pictures of nature.
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Thanks Hamish … nature did all the work 😉
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Nicely done, Georgia. I like the second one so 🙂
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I like these images and photo – excellent!
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Love this. My Summer soul is actually seeing beauty in Winter again!
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shadowing willows and pines
in black and white
Picturesque description in line with the contrast between the shadows and the sunlight. There’s also the inherent contrast between warm of Autumn to the cold of winter. Wonderful write Georgia!
Hank
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cute haiku.
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You put smile on the lips of nature….simply delightful…Adjei
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So well done … when I return to CDHK I’ll have to try this. Love it 🙂
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Sounds great!
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🙂
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Stunning photo…love morning haiku too!
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Nature’s signatures in a few lines well written Georgia.
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Thank you so much Chèvrefeuille – a pleasure learn new techniques which improve the haiku experience!
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