fanciful
wondrous pink magic …
five giants
watch the sun
sink into lake Garda – ah
cherry blossom skies
the sunset
bidding us goodbye
blushes pink
we enjoyed
this last day before the snowfall
in the olive groves
this morning
crows caw in the fog
harsh and loud
brash calls
they navigate with echos
like old black foghorns
§§§
even as I write
the fog shrouds Arco’s valley
the sky whispers – snow
inviting is the fireplace
and my mug of hot green tea
winter’s arrival
with each new snowflake
a fantasia
© G.s.k. ‘16
B&P’s Shadorma & Beyond – Shadorma – January 2, 2016
The Shadorma is a poetic form consisting of a six-line stanza (or sestet). The form is alleged to have originated in Spain. Each stanza has a syllable count of three syllables in the first line, five syllables in the second line, three syllables in the third and fourth lines, seven syllables in the fifth line, and five syllables in the sixth line (3/5/3/3/7/5) for a total of 26 syllables. A poem may consist of one stanza, or an unlimited number of stanzas (a series of shadorma).
Ah, the fantasia is just brilliant! esp. love the notion: ‘the sunset
bidding us goodbye
blushes pink’ connected with classic – becomes a classic…
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Thanks Humbird, what a lovely critique, I’m always happy to see your comments 🙂
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wonderful use of the three forms, each flowing within themselves and between each other without a jarring beat, allowing the tone and cadence envelope the sentiment.
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a lovely critique .. thank you very much 🙂
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I love this piece, Bastet — gorgeous photo, gorgeous music — and the lovely haiku and tanka.
hugs —-
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Thanks so much Jen …
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Beautifully done!
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