as the sun sets
the north star shines brightly
in the gloaming
awing the voyager
a grain of sand on the beach
© G.s.k. ‘16
5. Lofty style – taketakaki tei, a method of achieving grandeur and elevation
One of the traditional examples of this style is the poem by Fujiwara Yoshitsune (1169-1206) composed on the given theme of “the moon at dawn” in the Shinkokinshū #16:1545:
ana no to o / oshiakegata no / kumonma yori / kamiyo no tsuki / kage zo nokoreru
the coming dawn
pushes open the Gates of Heaven
from the clouds
the moon from the Age of Gods
is an image left behind
Carpe Diem Tokubetsudesu #66 Teika’s Ten Tanka Techniques by Jane Reichhold
staring at flame
light seers the nerve
lingering in dreams 🙂
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Splendid!
in the new dream worlds
blossoms of eternal spring
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another excellent interpretation — definitely captures grandeur
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Ah space is about as grand as you can get I think 😉
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