needless painful heartbreak comes
upon each awakening
with monumental effort
she fills empty space
the macrocosm of love
where’s the sweet of philosophy
of subtle nuzzling ’til noon
[lovingly kissing]
it would lacerate her soul
to indiscreetly reveal
the history of her people
[she’s monachopsis]
© G.s.k. ‘16
“Dodoitsu is a form of Japanese poetry developed towards the end of the Edo Period. Often concerning love or work, and usually comical, Dodoitsu poems consist of four lines with the syllabic structure 7-7-7-5 and no rhyme or metre.
It was a traditional form for popular and folk songs and the name (“quickly city to city”) appears to refer to the speed with which such new songs spread. In Japanese, the “dodoitsu” contains twenty-six sound units (onji) composed of four phrases in 7-7-7-5 sound units. It’s hard to find examples of “dodoitsu” among literature because most of these songs, sung accompanied with the shamisen (a banjo-like instrument with three strings), relied on the oral tradition and are therefore lost to us. Since the subject matter was either love or humor as viewed by inhabitants of the pleasure quarters, the existing works have attracted very little attention in English.”
Wordle #105 “April 11th, 2016” Mindlovesmisery’s Menagerie
Happy Day 12 of NaPoWriMo and GloPoWriMo, all!
Just totally delightful Georgia, beautiful…
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Thanks Michael 🙂
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Gorgeous use of both the words and the form Georgia!
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Thanks so much Yves.
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You do so many different sorts of poetry well.
janet
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Thanks Janet … that’s a great thing to say.
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I like this form.
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🙂 I do too and hope many others will try it.
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Great form…..new to me for sure……and that first stanza is utterly heartbreaking in such a palpable way!
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It is a splendid form … I’m glad you enjoyed the poems.
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Wow! you amaze me Cara. This was a beautiful and fun read and to think you did a new form I have not seen before plus included all those words!!
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Thanks Cher, I’m still thinking of where I want to go from regular haiku and form prompts – I do like wordles and this one came out nicely … anyway I’ve really taken just about more than I can chew doing the NaPoWriMo and A to Z challenges – I’m just about swamped … I still feel more at ease with waka and haiku though.
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My dear you could teach poetry if you could. Well you do …right here.
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🙂 … actually I feel like an beginner. Cross my heart!
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That’s because you are not too full of yourself. The best teacher always willing to learn more
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Hmmm too full of myself, that’s interesting …
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