Morning Haiku and Waka – November 28, 2015

morning walk
silence in the city
dawn breaks

each morning bleaker
carpets of leaves
skeleton trees

dawn visions
ravens on the wind
the beech stands nude

in the sky
another bird rumbles –
the plane for Venice

white cat mews
locked out of the house
cold in the courtyard

returning home
my poetry awaits me
embracing life

warming the water
a hot cup of green tea
no sugar needed

© G.s.k. ‘15

This week’s heeding haiku with Chèvrefeuille November 25th 2015,”baransu” on Mindlovesmisery’s Menagerie is very interesting indeed.  Here Chèvrefeuille does a break down and explanation of how to create balance in a haiku … here are the haiku he used as examples:

a walk through the city
step by step I discover
a newly built world

© Chèvrefeuille

the old pond
a frog jumps into it
sound of water

© Basho (Tr. Chèvrefeuille)

the old pond
yesterday … Irises bloomed
only a faint purple

© Chèvrefeuille

mountain stream
salmon swims to the well in thin air
rebirth of summer

© Chèvrefeuille

Haiga Festival – O’er cold waves – March 18, 2015

Gardasee in spring
winds buffet this lonely gull
o’er cold choppy waves

© G.sk. ‘15

Today Chèvrefeuille add a new technique to writing haiku called baransu.  What is Baransu?

‘baransu’ (associative balance), a new haiku writing technique which I dared creating myself. Than we had a few examples in which I have tried to explain this ‘baransu’- technique. I even tried my hand on the famous ‘frogpond’ haiku by Basho to re-form it in a ‘baransu’ haiku.

the old pond
a frog jumps into it
sound of water

© Basho (Tr. Chèvrefeuille)

I will start by re-producing the first line here: the old pond. What are the possibilities to associate on? I think “old” and “pond” will do. “Old” has to do with ‘classic’, ‘yesterday’, ‘age’, ‘a long time ago’. Which one can I use? I think I will try ‘yesterday’ to start creating the second line of this “baransu”-haiku.
‘yesterday … Irisses bloomed’ .. hm nice line, but what to use to associate on? In this line I can associate on ‘yesterday’. ‘Irisses’, and ‘bloomed’. ‘Yesterday’ has to do with time; ‘Irisses’ are purple mostly and ‘bloomed’ can mean ‘blossoming’ or ‘decay’ too. I will use ‘Irisses’ to associate on and than this line ‘pops-up’‘only a faint purple’.

Now I will bring the three lines together:

the old pond
yesterday … Irisses bloomed
only a faint purple

© Chèvrefeuille

I’m not sure that I did justice to the associative balance idea but it is an interesting concept to keep in mind!

Linked to Carpe Diem Haiku Kai – Writing Techniques #11 “baransu”