Copyright – Erin Leary
As I walk down the lane
Each drop of rain glistens
And I listen to the silence
In the spring rain, wandering …
The covered sky enfolds the world,
In mysterious whirls of gloom
Still, I’ve no room for sadness
In the spring rain, wandering …
The road proceeds for miles and miles
And I walking, smile just meditating,
Calmly contemplating life around me
In the spring rain, wandering …
Mist perhaps more than rain
Like my pain which is now dulled,
Long ago lulled by clement time, softened
In the spring rain, wandering …
Wandering in the soft spring rain one morning.
99 words
Friday Fictioneers – May 23, 2014
This is a hibrid sonnet…which I just put together like this because I liked it.
Bastet and Sekhmet's Library 
…and really, that’s the only reason to do it: because you like it. 🙂
Loving the peaceful feeling here.
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Amen! Glad you enjoyed it!
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🙂
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I think I was there! I love light rain abs listening to it x
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I think we’ve all been there, who know we may have been walking at the same time and we were together in spirit! xx
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very true 🙂
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🙂
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Just lovely in every way.
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So beautiful.
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Thanks loved the photo!
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You put it together very well. I like poetry and the sonnets, so this worked for me. Thanks!
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Thanks…I enjoyed putting it togehter.
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I love the rhyming structure of this, with the rhyme to the first line appearing half way through the second one – is that a standard technique or something you made up? (I’m a poetry dunce!) – either way it makes for a lovely rhythm and something half way between rhyming poetry and non-rhyming. I’m impressed!
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That was something I tried this morning…I’m not actually sure if it’s ever been done before, but it probably has been at one time or another.
This morning when I wrote the first two lines they came out with that rhyming pattern and I liked it so tried to keep doing it throughout the poem. It has a sonnet structure but isn’t any like sonnet I’ve ever seen. I’m glad you enjoyed it and your comment was stimulating! Thanks!
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I think the rhyming especially in the 3rd stanza works most efficient.. Nice flow, like you’re walking.
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Thanks Bjorne for your feedback! I hope to work on this form again, it’s challenging!
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Very soothing, Georgia. Makes me wish it were misty so I could go for a walk.
janet
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Thanks Janet. It can reallybe very pleasant to walk in the mist or in a gentle rain. Georgia
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Lovely poem. I could almost see the rain and mist. Well done. 🙂 —Susan
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Thanks Susan, I loved the photo! 🙂
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What a lovely poem! It captures everything good about this time of year! Great job! Nan 🙂
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Thanks Nan! 🙂
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Dear Georgia,
Verses as lovely and soothing as the scene you describe.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks you Rochelle, all do to the beautiful photo you chose this week. Ciao, Georgia
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What a lovely poem, Georgia…it reads so light and soothing…love the repetition of that last line, gives it that peaceful mood and you said it ALL under 100 words!! Brava Bella!!
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Thanks Oliana…that photograph was really inspiring for me…all the early morning walks in the woods crowded in and took me by the hand…
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