The Hungarian Badriomaku – Departures – August 6, 2015

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Departures

you turn
looking sad
as the train arrives
tears
stand on your lashes
not wanting to fall
then I hear – All aboard!

lover’s
farewell kiss
one last long embrace
spring
will bring May flowers
for some – not them
he died on the front.

© G.s.k. ‘15

The Hungarian Badriomaku – syllable count of 2-3-5-1-5-4-5

I must really thank Paloma for sending me this link to Consciouscacophony post today, where I learnt a new form .. go and read C.C.’s post – stupendous!

19 thoughts on “The Hungarian Badriomaku – Departures – August 6, 2015

  1. Love what you did with this form….so very moving! I’m with you on the syllable thing…I much prefer that to meter, which I still don’t understand at all 😛

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    • Thanks C.C. … i admit that when I started writing poetry I did quite a few prompts that basically are syllable counts .. even a sonnet though you use meter is actually so many syllables … getting into meter is fun, but in my opinion if you have a sense of rhythm you can write a great sonnet and you’ll probably be using meter even if you just count the syllables … but that’s my opinion.

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