My summer morn began too soon …
Thus abed I pondered song birds,
Puzzled over obscure haiku,
And prompts I thought I’d like to write.
– Jumping out of bed, inspired, I fled –
Sat down behind my white keyboard,
Alas my inspiration, fled …
Dried up and gone like morning dew …
So I had coffee – then chatted.
This is from a prompt I came to through Bjorn, yesterday. I’d never heard or at least had never wrote for Poetry Jam, but I was intriqued by the form and how Bjorn had written it so very well!
Then this morning I saw the Jen on Blog it or Lose it! had also given it a whirl, so copy-cat that I am, I had to try it out. As it turned out it was less complicated than I had thought at first. Though not inspired, I’ll post this and try again in the near future.
This is how it works:
– a total of 3 stanzas;
– 1st and 3rd stanzas 1 & 3 contain different thoughts;
– 1st and 3rd stanzas have the same number of lines (and possibly meter and/or rhyme) – depending on the poet’s preferences;
– 2nd stanza connects the *meaning* of the 1st and 3rd stanzas;
– 2nd stanza is one line and is enclosed in tildes (~);
– 2nd stanza is technically the last line of the 1st stanza AND the 1st line of the 3rd stanza.
I also like to write in a certain form – it’s called freestyle or something and you basically write and jump when it sounds good. Rhymes help with sounding good but they’re not obligatory and don’t necessarily have to be at the end of a line :p
Otherwise I’m bad at form and shape especially when it gets so complicated… every time I see what you write (even if it’s just haikus) I’m like wow! The first time I tried shadorma it ended up in a mess at the end I was just adding 3-syllable lines everywhere… so I admire you for achieving it all so effortlessly (at least that’s how it looks)
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Oh … I write in that style and call it free verse 🙂 actually, I’ve been writing poetry just since last March (2013) more or less … hadn’t touched the stuff since I was 17 (gasp! ). To tell the truth, some of it does come pretty effortlessly now, and others not so easy. I’m not an exceptional poet, I like to write and like to think that some of my stuff is worth reading though 🙂
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It always is 🙂
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Thanks! 😀
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One form I do like though is limerick 🙂
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limericks is funs stuff!
there was a young book worm from France
who didn’t really stand half a chance
when she woke up at 8
she’d procrastinate
’til she saw it was noon with a glance.
😀
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There was an Italian poet
Who that French girl had only just met
She’d write things in form
And be up from morn
But spend days writing haiku an sonnet
:p
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two poets from Europe had fun
making limerics at a shot of a gun
they played for a while
then had to go pop off to work
so took off in a neck-braking run!
Thanks dear…this has been fun!!!
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Ah while doesn’t rhyme with work!
But yes it has been fun 😉 you’re right “it’s off to work we go” *whistles*
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yeah … didn’t rhyme oh well can’t always have brie and champagne! 🙂
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I can’t believe you broke the rules, of all people! *fake shock* 😉
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Silly critter … you learn the rules so that you can break them and not look too foolish!
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And that’s one of the many wonders of the English language: you learn the rules and then you get told that once you know them well enough you can break them all. Oh the irony 😉
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lol … yes it may seem like that, but I was only speaking about writing poetry but specifically about haiku I guess…but it works with other poetry too … unless you find a grammar nazi that doesn’t agree!
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It’s not necessarily poetry but mainly writing in general 🙂
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True … but up to a point. Some rules are good to remember, but if you’ve learnt them, you know when you can “fudge” a little … and certainly dialogue sometimes must be ungrammatical.
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Aye that’s why you must learn them first and master them before you can discard them… Or something along the lines 😉
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Exactly!
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Writing puentes is really quite fun
If you start before morning is done
Pen a limerick or three
Before noonday tea
And you’ll still have some time for the sun!
Okay – how did I get distracted by limericks?
http://mainelywrite.blogspot.com/2014/06/the-bridge-puente.html
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Why thanks Donna for your link and poem! I really enjoyed it!
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I really like it Georgia! It’s sweet — and so many of us here on WP (and Blogger) can appreciate it! “Ya done good!” 😉
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Thanks Jen … I really thought the yours and Bjorn’s were great … but I love your feedback!
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You’re very welcome — 🙂
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🙂
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Ha, this made me smile. I know exactly what you mean. So often it seems I have some kind of inspiration in my brain…and when I sit down at the keyboard my mind is blank. So…I play ‘candy crush.’ LOL.
Nice to see you. I do hope you will visit some others from Poetry Jam!
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I most certainly will give it the old college try to drop by and read some of the others … as you saw from the post, it was reading two of them that got me here. Very inspiring …. ‘candy crush’ don’t think I’ve got that one, I’m a frog that shoots little balls it’s call Zuma’s Revenge!
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ha i would not hold my breathe on that …this whole group of four is more concerned with themselves and responding on their own blog than any kind of community…
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perhaps their community life is more than just their own blog …
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Yup, I do see this is a group that probably won’t be reciprocal. More interested in chatting with themselves. Oh well. I won’t be visiting again.
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I’m so glad to see you at Poetry Jam, Georgia. I sure can relate to your wonderful puente.
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Thanks Laurie … it’s been nice to find the post! I think sooner or later every writer could probably relate to that feeling of void! 😉
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I like this, I will have it a go as since there does not seem too many restrictions with rhyme…I was wondering…could it be 2 haiku connected with one line???? just wondering if that would be fun too. Love the limericks Italy and France had going too!! Vous êtes très amusantes!! 😀
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Now I didn’t think about using two haiku with a connecting line. 😀 … I’mabOOkworm is a cool kid and inspired a little limerick game … I’d forgotten that it was on this page! Thanks for dropping in and hope you do give the puente a trial run! I’ll look for it 🙂
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I did on both blogs:)
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I’m about finished with this part of my morning work … then it’s off to my e-mail to look at what you’ve come up with! 🙂
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You are so devoted..I am almost off to bed…I wrote a lot in my notebook while waiting for my son to visit but he did not show up…saw his dad instead.
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😦 terrible to have to wait like that.
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I was 5 mins late in responding to a text, so he called his dad. I’m glad he was visiting as he is going through some stress…so that IS what counts and I did scribble a lot in my notebook 😀
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Well, it IS a good way to keep practicing my haiku {grins}
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It sure is! And good then that your son got to see his dad… 🙂
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While waiting I wrote so much…can’t transcribe my notes fast enough…have to take a break to visit my mom.
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Have a nice visit … having put them in notebooks they mellow! 🙂
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Nice!
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Hi Bastet,
That was so nicely penned… I loved the challenged you had to follow and the ending result (AKA poem) stands out … The second stanza made me think of Walt Whitman, so joyful…
And the contrsta between the first and the third stanza is so well tied through that verse of the second one…
Just pure fun and very well done, as always…
Best wishes and happy weekend to you, my dear Georgia,
Aquileana 🙂
──✽✿✽──
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Hello!
Thanks you very much for your interesting feedback .. I enjoyed reading what you received from the poem. It was daunting at first, but in fact the explanation was harder to follow than writing the poem! I’ve never been compaired to the great Walt Whitman before … what a compliment! Thank you so much for taking time to write cara Aquileanq! 🙂
Georgia
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I like how you weave your heart into your words and how you touch emotion
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Thanks very much! That’s very kind of you.
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So glad you came by Poetry Jam. I think you did well with the puente form. I like the feeling of this poem and it seemed I was right there with you.
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Thanks, it was a very interesting challenge.
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Nicely described. However it does irritate when the ideas fly way while sitting blankly with pen and paper!
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Ach does it ever. Last night there was a perfectly lovely storm here in Italy … the lightning flashed in an almost constant succession of light … brilliant booming. A poem began to form whilst I was in that stage of not quite sleeping but not being awake either. I turned on the light, grabbed my pen and puff … all gone. It’s funny how the ones that get away always bothers me so much. Glad you enjoyed the poem though.
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I totally agree.. The ideas that go away are the ones that burn a whole in the heart!
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So very true!
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