Haiga Festival 4 – Mountain Snow and Shadows – March 4, 2015

path haiga

 

snow and shadows
walking on this mountain path
lost and soundless

where is the direction
what are the goals

The above is the tanka I wrote while I was editing the photo … but transcribing the tanka the following variation popped up, and as it feels more like our haiku master of the day Taneda Santoka on Carpe Diem Haiku Kai Special I thought I’d leave it here for your comments:

snowy shadows
this mountain path
lost and voiceless

which direction
what is the goal

© G.s.k. ‘15

As you read above today’s Carpe Diem Special is dedicated to Taneda Santoka(1882-1940) who wrote using the “freestyle haiku” form created by Ogiwara Seisensui (1884-1976) his haiku master.  Here are some examples of his work, but first of all here are two quotes by Taneda Santokai:

“Santoka once said: “Days I don’t enjoy: any day I don’t walk, drink sake, and compose haiku.”
And here is another quote of a saying by Santoka: “Westerners try to conquer the mountains. People of the East contemplate the mountains. For us, mountains are not an object of scientific study but a work of art. Patiently I taste the mountains.””

mizu ni kage aru tabibito de aru (SMT)

reflection
in the water
a traveler

my shadow
on the water,
traveler I am.

and our Chèvrefeuilles translation:

shadow
in water
travels

© Chèvrefeuille

19 thoughts on “Haiga Festival 4 – Mountain Snow and Shadows – March 4, 2015

  1. very thought provoking. The zen of haiku is becoming more involving and more demanding the more I read. I can relate to your question.

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    • Well … I’ve been interested in Zen far longer than I’ve been interested in haiku to tell the truth .. in this particular haiku though, it was the influence of the guest haiku poet that gave the tone to the ku 🙂 But I’m very glad you could relate!

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  2. Oh I can feel this, cara…and leaving my office those last two lines were my questions…I arrived on a somewhat spring day at 2p.m. and left at 10pm. with blowing snow and could not find the sidewalk!

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  3. Wow Georgia a wonderful post … I like your first version a lot, but as I read that second version than it overrules my feeling of the first one. Maybe it’s the Zen which is more clear in that second than in that first tanka … really this is a great response and in tune with Taneda Santoka

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    • Thanks you Chèvrefeuille … the second version began as a typographical error … but then i looked at that first error and followed the indication of trimming off the excess. I think you’re right it does reflect Taneda Santoka more than the first one did and it’s definitely more Zen.

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    • Thanks Hamish … I have to agree about the second version … it struck me as very Zen … I must have had a friendly kami on hand as i was transcribing the haiku – the second was born from a typing error… and I’m happy you enjoyed the photo as well 🙂

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