Haiga Festival – Flotsam and shells – March 22, 2015

OLYMPUS DIGITAL CAMERAtide in tide out
water-logged flotsam with shells
here but soon gone

© G.s.k. ‘15

linked to Paloma’s ” the haiku of Santoka Taneda” prompt.  This post, for the Carpe Diem Haiku Special prompts us to try to write an all new haiku based on the style of the featured poet.  She gave us many great examples; I used this first one with her considerations to help me write today’s haiga:

shigurete sono ji ga yomenai michishirube

soaking wet
I can’t read the letters
on the signpost

© Santoka Taneda

“I love that this haiku is ambiguous – “soaking wet” refers to what?  the poet? the signpost? both?  Do you hear the hissing of the rain in how he’s repeating sh / s / ch sounds?   And – what wonderful layers of meaning in the haiku!” 

(and enjoyed this consideration as well)

“… notice that his line length is very irregular – and that he loves repetition?”   Paloma

 Wakeitte mo wakeitte mo aoi yama
I go in   I go in    still the blue mountains

   Shitodo ni nurete kore wa michishirube no ishi
Soaking wet     this a road-marker stone

 Enten o itadaite koi aruku
Burning heaven on my head      I beg      I walk

and here is Paloma’s haiga example:


15 thoughts on “Haiga Festival – Flotsam and shells – March 22, 2015

  1. Love this, Georgia — the repetition that he liked so much, and a sense of weariness perhaps, too — and the photo is great. 🙂 Looks like you were able to make it to the beach after all — AWESOME!

    Btw — the sign in the yellow haiga is “PDS” [Pretty Dirty Sign] – back from the days of WDBWP 🙂

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    • Thanks … I like Santoka Teneda’s style a lot … it gives both a lot of liberty, but also condenses the emotions rather well. Glad you enjoyed the photo.

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  2. I think your middle line here is wonderful – a great image and, as you read it, the “s” sounds actually bring to mind the tide hissing up and down the beach 🙂

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